The Object

Just sent 11 pages. Loved writing it. Will do more.

Neighborhood Ninja

I could use help finding opportunities to give it more punch, make it more clear, and to trim it without sacrificing anything important. Any comments are always appreciated.


Thanks,
Alan

Eddie and Goob - last time!!

Hey Write Fuers,

Here is my submission.  Eddie and Goob is finally at the stage of sending out to agents.  I ask you to look at it one more time and especially see it from an agent's point of view, if you can!  I'm attaching the first and the last chapter.  The first chapter you know very well by now.  The last chapter is brand new.  I wrote it in the last three weeks.  But the whole thing has seen pretty significant revision since you saw it.  Lots of new language and expressions and Eddie's father is now a significant part of the story.  It might be a bit difficult for you to go straight from the first to the last chapter like this.  Just remember that in chapter four (the chapter before the last chapter) Goob gets unseen by the neighbor boy, resulting in a black hole.  He still feels a little of the trauma of that, despite being rescued.

I fully intend to send this out to agents for real after this, so please spare me no critique!  

Thanks so much!

Dave

New Schedule!!!

Posting the schedule in this easy-to-view place!

April 28th: Dave

May 19th: Riley

June 9th: Alan

June 30th: Bill

July 21st: Andy

Sludge

Hey Guys,

I finished a draft of Sludge. It turned out to be about 300 pages. I've also made some changes to the begging to make it jive with the what the rest of the book became. I'll also be submitting the first 35 pages to Tor Publishing so I'd really appreciate it if you'd gave another look at the first 20 pages with the new material. I'll be emailing it shortly. Does it flow with the new material? Does it make sense? How can I make it better? All comments on anything are always appreciated.

Thanks,
Alan

New Dark is the Night opening

Hi fellas,

Sorry this is so late.  It's a new opening to Dark is the Night.  Quite a few similarities to its previous incarnation, except I've bumped it up in the timeline, so the first chapter is actually the last scene before the climax (chronologically).  I'm drafting a revision of this that starts en medias res but then does less chronological skipping around.  Let me know what you think! And be tough!  I mean business with this revision.

Ri

Late

Hi fellas,

February's been a crazy month.  I probably should have posted something by now. I'm sorry I haven't.  If someone has something to submit now, please do so by all means and I'll go next.  Otherwise, I'll send you some pages by next weekend.

Write on!