Hey everyone,
I've attached the opening chapters of Rattled, a YA novel I'm working on. These are the first 20 pages of what might end being around 300 (just so you have an idea of what this opening chunk is in comparison to what the whole story arc might end up being).
My concerns:
1) Is my protagonist sympathetic?
2) Does the story draw you on? Does it move with good velocity?
3) What's working well and what isn't?
4) Where do you imagine the story going from here?
Thanks, guys! Happy Fathers Day to all of you fathers!
Andy
