Sludge Beginning

Hi Group,

This round I'm submitting a new beginning of Sludge. I pitched Sludge to a New York Agent at a writer's conference and she asked for the manuscript. That was two years ago and I never sent it. I wasn't satisfied with the beginning and then I got sidetracked.

Please let me know if you think I'm starting the story in right place or if it could start somewhere better.

A a reader, do you see an inciting incident that calls Sludge to action? If not, do you have any ideas about what the inciting incident could be? Or if the inciting incident is too weak, how can I improve it or make it a more compelling call to action?

Any other comments are also appreciated.

I'll be emailing the first 20 pages shortly.

Thanks, Alan

The New Schedule

Here it is!

July 16: Alan

August 6: Carolyn

August 27: Riley

September 17: Dave

October 8: Bill

Chasing Bo

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Here's the post for Chasing Bo!