Hey Write Fuers,
Here is my submission. Eddie and Goob is finally at the stage of sending out to agents. I ask you to look at it one more time and especially see it from an agent's point of view, if you can! I'm attaching the first and the last chapter. The first chapter you know very well by now. The last chapter is brand new. I wrote it in the last three weeks. But the whole thing has seen pretty significant revision since you saw it. Lots of new language and expressions and Eddie's father is now a significant part of the story. It might be a bit difficult for you to go straight from the first to the last chapter like this. Just remember that in chapter four (the chapter before the last chapter) Goob gets unseen by the neighbor boy, resulting in a black hole. He still feels a little of the trauma of that, despite being rescued.
I fully intend to send this out to agents for real after this, so please spare me no critique!
Thanks so much!
Dave
Here is my submission. Eddie and Goob is finally at the stage of sending out to agents. I ask you to look at it one more time and especially see it from an agent's point of view, if you can! I'm attaching the first and the last chapter. The first chapter you know very well by now. The last chapter is brand new. I wrote it in the last three weeks. But the whole thing has seen pretty significant revision since you saw it. Lots of new language and expressions and Eddie's father is now a significant part of the story. It might be a bit difficult for you to go straight from the first to the last chapter like this. Just remember that in chapter four (the chapter before the last chapter) Goob gets unseen by the neighbor boy, resulting in a black hole. He still feels a little of the trauma of that, despite being rescued.
I fully intend to send this out to agents for real after this, so please spare me no critique!
Thanks so much!
Dave
