I am sending the first 4 chapters of "The Stranger," the second mystery in the T.K. & Associates series. This is actually a re-writing of what I originally submitted in April, 2012. I went back to the comments from Riley, Andy and Alan, then rewrote after reviewing in depth what they had to say.

Their comments + Mary K's comments gave me exactly what I was looking for.

Please review and let me know what you think of these chapters as a stand alone chapter book.  Do they work for kids that haven't read Tramp 1?

Will send the manuscript in a separate email.

Thanks to all for being the best writer's group on this earth.

Sludge June

Here's another installment of Sludge. There are some name changes. Mr. Rogers is now Dr. Bradshaw, Glade is Sludge, Glade's friend Rob is not Hammer and Sludge's nemesis on the fistball field is now Lora instead of Dora.

Any and all comments are appreciated. What works and how can it be made more engaging to middle-grade readers.

Thanks

Amazon Reviews

Tramp thanks Alan and Dave for their reviews on Amazon.  He is working on his next episode. Very Elementary and with great Observation.

Schedule: SUMMER 2014

Hey everybody,

Below is the new schedule.

Alan, I pushed back the first submission date to give you an extra week.

And Bill, you're down for late June, but if you'd to switch with someone, just let me know and I can change up the schedule.

Happy writing this summer!

June 8th:       Alan
June 29th:     Bill
July 20th:       Andy
August 10th:   Dave
August 31st:    Carolyn

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Carolyn , you have written a story that has many origins. Your alma mater as you mention, and one I just made up, I think. 

M. Night Shyamalan's 1999 movie, The Sixth Sense, with Hayley Joel Osment as a boy that sees the dead and Bruce Willis as his therapist. 

Anyway, I love the story no matter where it came from. 

I made a few notes in the manuscript that I sent via email. 

When I write I am 11 not 17 and have no idea what a ya reader wants and can't help with that bit. I do believe Jack and Ronan are linked inexplicably.

I really like ghost stories that have good endings. So, Carolyn, what's next?

Blood and Loot

A swashbuckling adventure for your appraisal. Looking forward to your constructive comments. Thanks gang!

Jody, Jody, Silver

Hi all,

Just emailed you my short story"Jody, Jody, Silver" for some feedback. What works for you? What doesn't? Could the ending do more? Could the title do more?

Thanks!!!