Clutch

Hi everyone,

Here's the opening for Clutch (which used to be Kid Clutch and, before that, Rattled). 

I've been using a different approach. Basically, for the past four months, I've been doing all sorts of prewriting with Clutch in an attempt to gain as much knowledge about the story world (characters' motivations and relationships, sensory knowledge of all the settings, possible scenes and scene sequences,etc.) as possible. So this is actually the first scene I've drafted in months, and it may be a little bloated. I'd just like to know how you react to what's here. And, as always, I'm uber-grateful for your brilliant feedback! 

Best,

Andy

 

(Note from Riley: Hi Andy.  I posted your original E-mail message here so I'd have a place to put my comments on Clutch. Hope you don't mind!  Great work, by the way!)

Tramp Is Taken Captive

I am emailing the next 14 pages of "The Dog And His Boy." Tramp is taken captive by Rodney Smithers, the leisure suit wearing uncle of Big Bob. I am looking for comments and suggestions on the characters and the progress of the mystery and the mess Tramp is in.

Tramp Is Taken Captive

I am emailing the next 14 pages of "The Dog And His Boy." Tramp is taken captive by Rodney Smithers, the leisure suit wearing uncle of Big Bob. I am looking for comments and suggestions on the characters and the progress of the mystery and the mess Tramp is in.

Schedule

Bill - April 17
Andy -  May 8
Riley - May 29
Alan - June 19
Chris - July 10
David - July 31
Jason - August 21
Daniel - September 11

Eddie and Goob

Gentlemen,

I've sent you the first two chapters of Eddie and Goob. Please channel your 7-11 year old boy self and let me know what works for you and what doesn't, as well as any other general comments you have.

As always, thanks for spending some time in my brain and offering up your thoughtful impressions.

Your friend in fu,

Dave

.docx

Hi fellas!

Just wonder if I could make a request as I've run into this problem with a few of your manuscripts. My computer (I use an older Mac) cannot open .docx files. If you use a newer Microsoft-based computer, you likely send your manuscript in the .docx format, which is totally cool because most (normal) people can read these files no problem. But I'm not normal, and I can't.  So if you wouldn't mind sending a .doc or .pdf format out as a secondary option for viewing your manuscripts, I'd greatly appreciate it!

Riley

Benefits of Write Fu

I have finally revised "The Dog And His Boy" using the suggestions from my last submission. It was like having 5 editors from the best kids publishing house in the US, reading, analyzing, commenting and basically improving the manuscript.

Maybe the next step is putting a virtual tour together for 8 kids ebooks.

Thank you to all the Write Fu editorial staff.


Bill