I've sent you the opening chapters of Kid Clutch and The Breeze--the new incarnation of Rattled.
I've been working hard to re-imagine this story--lots of rewriting and experimentation. In this draft, I'm giving dual narrators a try, and I've tried to amp up Brian's reason for suddenly moving to Winona (though that reason isn't revealed yet in this opening section, do I give enough that the reason seems significant?). I've also been working on deepening the story of the other main character, Trina. Are you drawn into her storyline?
At this point, what I'm interested in is ratcheting up the story's significance and its feeling--does the story hit you where it counts? Maybe some things do but some things don't? I'd love your insights you have into these characters, questions you can pose to help me imagine the characters more fully, and any other suggestions and possibilities you can offer.
Thanks, guys!
